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2008哈爾濱市中考
朋友，還記得那些陪伴你左右的同桌(deskmate)嗎？他們樂觀向上；他們自強不息；他們誠實可信；他們勤奮好學……你的生活因他們而精彩！請通過一件事的記述，讓我們認識一下你的一位勤奮好學的(hard-working） 同桌吧！ 要求： 1.請根據(jù)所提供的信息材料和話題（不要逐句翻譯），寫出結構嚴謹、內(nèi)容完整、語言豐富優(yōu)美、語法準確、可讀性強的短文。 2.至少80詞。 3.不得使用真實姓名、地名和學校名。 4.題目自擬。 寫作指導 這是一篇記敘與描寫相結合的文章。根據(jù)所提供的材料，首先應介紹一個人物，包括描寫他/她的外貌和性格特征等；然后通過記敘一件事來展現(xiàn)這個人。同學們需要注意的是：在描述人物時通常用一般現(xiàn)在時，而記述一件事應該用一般過去時。 描寫人物是大家比較熟悉的話題，但要寫好并不容易。首先大家應避免寫成流水帳，或用千篇一律的套話空話使文章顯得索然無味。在記述一件事情時，應該選擇能夠給讀者留下深刻印象的事例，或能夠突出所描述人物性格特點的典型事例。記述時要注意語言表達的清楚準確。 最后的結尾要扣題。同學們可以對所描述的人物進行簡單的評價，詞匯量大的同學可以用排比句來抒情，給文章添彩。適當運用從句和連詞將使文章更加流暢連貫。 下面的詞匯和句型可以給大家在寫作時提供一些幫助： optimistic, honest, helpful, colorful, friendly, clever, help somebody with something, get along well with, learn from, help each other. 范文1：一檔文 My Deskmate During these three years, I can't go through without her help. She is my deskmate - Mary. She is a really kind girl, who never fails to make others happy. We are fascinated with her because she often helps us with our lessons. At first, I'm not very glad of sitting beside her because she is so excellent. And that will bring me too much pressure. However, one thing changed my opinion and we became close friends. That was a cold winter morning, I got a bad cold. Nobody noticed that and I felt very sad. When my deskmate knew that, she ran to the school clinic and bought some medicine for me. Then she gave me some fruit and poured hot water for me. Looking at her busy doing these things, I was moved entirely. Thanks to her help, I spent the terrible day happily. That is my deskmate. She gave me help and warmth. I feel lucky that I have such a good deskmate. She is the sunshine in my world! 點評： 這是一篇寫得非常成功的文章。它用生動的語言描述了同桌的特點，恰當?shù)剡\用了復合句和連詞使文章更加靈活，流暢。文章通過對同桌在作者生病時伸出友愛之手這件事的描述，使文章的主人公形象更加具體，逼真。 范文2：二檔文 My Deskmate Mike was my deskmate. He was tall and thin. He was clever and hard-working. And he was a top student in my class. I think he influenced me a lot. When I was in Grade One, I was not interested in Chinese. I thought it was boring. I was often absent-minded in Chinese class. When Mike found this, he often reminded me that I should listen to the teacher carefully. After class, he often helped me with my Chinese. He told me the importance of learning Chinese. He also taught me some good ways of learning Chinese. Because of Mike's help, I became more and more interested in Chinese. I got an A in the final exam. I really couldn't believe that! What great progress I made! Mike is not only my deskmate, but also my best friend. Without him, my life won't be so colorful! 點評： 從整體上看，這篇文章寫得也不錯。作者形象地描述了同桌的外貌與性格特征，對一件事情的記述也比較清楚。但有美中不足之處：1. 第一自然段的時態(tài)不正確，描述客觀事實應該用一般現(xiàn)在時。2. 在記述一件事情時， “often”這個詞出現(xiàn)的次數(shù)太多，可換成其他頻度副詞以避免重復。3. 在適當?shù)牡胤饺绻芗右恍┻B詞會使文章顯得更加流暢。 主題詞匯和有用句型 主題詞匯： 外貌：good-looking 長得好看的,pretty 漂亮的, beautiful 美麗的, lovely 可愛的,medium height 中等身高, medium build 中等身材,overweight 超重的,slim 苗條的 性格/品質(zhì)：brave 勇敢的, confident 有信心的, honest 誠實的,patient 有耐心的, easy-going 隨和的, outgoing 外向的,energetic 精力充沛的, forgetful 健忘的, generous 寬宏大量的, talented 有才能的, hard-working 勤勞的, helpful 樂于助人的 有用句型： Mr Green is a reporter 格林先生是一名記者 He's very kind/ polite 他很和藹/有禮貌…… I like/enjoy doing 我喜歡做…… My hobby is... 我的愛好是…… I'm good at... 我擅長…… I'm interested in... 我對……感興趣 My favorite subject is... 我最喜愛的學科是…… 模擬試題 初三生活將結束，在三年的初中生活當中，你遇到過很多老師，請根據(jù)你的經(jīng)歷，以My favorite teacher為題，寫你最喜歡的一位老師。 要求：1. 寫出你最喜歡這位老師的原因，條理清楚。 2. 詞數(shù)在80詞左右。 3. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名校名。 參考范文 My favorite teacher Everyone has his or her favorite teacher, so do I . My favorite teacher is Miss Wang, our English teacher. Miss Wang is beautiful. She has big eyes and curly hair. She wears glasses. Most of all, I like her because she is very kind and patient to us. Three years ago, when I started at my school, I found English very difficult. At first, Miss Wang seemed very strict. But she asked students with difficulties to her office where she helped them face to face. Little by little, I began to see she is very kind and patient. She explains everthing to us until we understand it. She never gives up on students like me who have trouble with English. She tells us not to worry and never gives up. She inspired me and makes me do my best to study English. I have made great progress over the last three years. Time flies! I'm going to graduate soon and I really want to say: “Thank you, my beloved teacher!” |
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